Passage Rewrite

Elizabeth Vieburg


Passage Rewrite Pages 10-12
Rewritten from the Perspective of Nanny
I knew something was going on before I even saw Janie and Johnny Taylor kiss. It was a late, spring afternoon when I saw the two of them together. Of course my suspicions were confirmed as soon as Janie let that boy kiss her over the gatepost. Janie had recently decided that she liked to spend her afternoons laying under the pear tree in the back yard and that day was no different. Every spare moment she had was spent day dreaming under that tree. For some reason the tree intrigued her. Whether it be the pear blossoms just starting to open or maybe the tree whispered some sense of mystery to her young ears. Either way she loved that old pear tree. Every once and a while when I wasn't doing a chore I would look out at her and remember what it was like when I was her age. My childhood was nothing like Janie's. No freedom. If I ever got a moment alone it was a treasure. Maybe that was why I never stopped Janie from spending her spare moments there. As Janie stretched out underneath the tree, I realized that she was growing up and would soon be looking to marry. I never had the chance to marry into a good family. All I wanted was for Janie to have the best life she could possibly have. I went to lay down. My deep thoughts had started to plague me with a horrible headache. As soon as my head touched the pillow I was asleep. Suddenly I was awakened by Janie making a ruckus in the kitchen. I thought nothing of it and fell back into a restless sleep. While I was sleeping I dreamed of voices. The voices were coming from somewhere far away, but they kept coming closer. Then in my dream I knew it was Janie's voice. Janie's voice whispering to a man. I was instantly awake. I quickly peered outside just in time to see Johnny Taylor kiss Janie. I was so shocked I couldn't do anything but say her name.  I couldn't even say her name with command and reprimand. I couldn't believe that she had grown up this fast. Of course I always knew she would eventually become a woman, but I never imagined it would be like this. We both knew that in that single moment Janie's childhood was gone. I was upset, but I couldn't look at her with eyes filled with anger. I couldn't help but look at her with love and understanding. In that moment I wasn't looking at Janie, I was looking at her mother. I couldn't help but think that she was the one who was supposed to be here. She was the one who should be hearing about Janie's first step into womanhood. Although there was nothing I could do about it. Janie's mother had chosen to leave, which meant that I was the one who had this responsibility. I needed to tell her that now that she had reached womanhood it was time that she married. I knew that telling her this would upset and confuse her, but it was something that needed to be done. A million thoughts racing through my head, I told her that she was now a woman. She refused the thought, just like I knew she would. After assuring her that she was now a woman, I told her that I wanted to see her married as soon as possible. Even though I knew she might resent me for saying this, she needed to hear it. In that moment I almost started to resent her mother. I should be the Nanny not the mother. The one that Janie would come to for comforting, not the one she should be hearing hard things from.